Lonnie Preusser
Tuesday, August 9, 2011
Do you like the opening to my short story?
I like the character you are building :) He seems interesting! It is quite a good beginning, draws you in. Maybe working on the dialogue between the teacher and teenage girl will make it a little bit better
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